Music Video Production - Editing Practice (Car Scene)

This is the first edit of the running over scene. I had to be very careful when I edited this as I wanted to make it look as convincing as possible regardless of the fact that I have no budget. Creating this scene involved filming several different shots and editing them together to form a quick paced series of events culminating in me being run over.

What did I do?
I began by filming a panning shot of the car driving from one end of the street to the other at great speed. I then followed that with a long shot of me running onto the road whilst Liam watched looking shocked, after so many seconds I signalled for my friend to again drive down the road at a quick speed but this time stopping about a metre away from me. To make the car look like it was actually going to hit me, I then got my friend to drive at an extremely slow speed towards me until his car tapped me on the legs. This was filmed a a close up of my knees with the cars bonnet seen coming towards them. To make this look convincing I sped up the clip by 100% when editing it which gave the illusion of the car travelling at a much faster speed. I then filmed what started off as a close up of my hand which zoomed out to slowly reveal me lying dead on the road with a grieving Liam kneeling next to me, holding my hand. This was followed by a tracking shot of the white cider bottle rolling along the road. I then filmed a medium close up of Liam screaming 'no' whilst running out of shot which I later slowed down for dramatic effect. I then filmed the same shot again but as a close-up of Liam's face. 

What will I change?
I had originally intended for the white cider to be a recurring motif throughout the video due to the 'white lightning' reference in the song's second verse, and the narrative being about escaping that type of hedonistic lifestyle. Unfortunately nowhere stocks White Lightning so we had to make do with a basic white cider bottle for the tracking shot. I feel that this detracts from the lyrics and is not clear to the viewer and I think I am going to remove it from the final version.
In the close-up of Liam's face I feel that he is not showing enough emotion what so ever. I have decided to re-film this shot but to also film an extreme close up of his eyes widening in shock.
This scene is intended to be a flashback so I am going to add a sepia/grindhouse filter to these shots in order to make the footage look older and more dated.